Well, in your articles you always mention as much as you can
* what you did last week
* which similar hardware you covered beforehand
* after half a page you come up with significant news belonging to the headline
* what you will test in the future
To my mind you should start focusing on the significant part only.
In the beginning you are talking about Nvidia again. This is the part where I got confused. Leave that part out since it hasn't anything to do with that topic. Instead you could have written that it's an independent chip. THIS belongs to the news.
Just my humble opinion...
* what you did last week
* which similar hardware you covered beforehand
* after half a page you come up with significant news belonging to the headline
* what you will test in the future
To my mind you should start focusing on the significant part only.
In the beginning you are talking about Nvidia again. This is the part where I got confused. Leave that part out since it hasn't anything to do with that topic. Instead you could have written that it's an independent chip. THIS belongs to the news.
Just my humble opinion...
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